this is me and my friend witting about when we are older
Thursday, June 11, 2020
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Great writing Olly and Briana! And good teamwork!
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ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your writing. I love that you had chapters in your story, it added interest. I am so thankful that Olly happened to have a parachute on when you were both hiking in the story! It may be a good idea to increase the size of your font (words) if you have room on your slides. It will make it easier to read.
I can't wait to see more work that you post on your blog, Olly.
Mrs McIntyre
Hi Briana and Olly! I like the way you added full stops. It reminds me of a snowy day . Next time i you should add more wow words and some more excitement in your story <3
ReplyDeleteNaomi here sorry i added an i so ignore that sorry.
ReplyDeletehey Olly, Briana here, i loved the way the you fixed the story in the end when you put "the end" at the last slide. this reminds me of the time when a car on a moution and the car fell down at the part when i fell (lol) next time make the writing bigger and brighter? BYE!
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